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15 Dec. 2009, 02:09pm
Raivu

Poetry by Raivu

I'm a man of poetry. I love it. It's very descriptive. Does anyone else do or love poetry? If so, please share them here. I'd love to read them.

My new best friend
Raivu

I made a new friend today.
So modest and sweet.
We went to the park
Where we spent most of our week

We agreed to be together
‘Till death do us part
And so she bares not a ring
But a large golden heart

We spend every day together
It never goes to our head
As I lay down at night
She joins me in bed

Her hair is so soft
It gleams in the sun
When I want to walk
She wants to run

A man will never be
As lucky as I
For I truly love
This dog of mine.
15 Dec. 2009, 02:19pm
iLuwMuffinz<3

this is nice :]
I loved you forever
I loved you with my heart
but u left me there
crying and tearing all apart

thats little of mine :rolleyes:
15 Dec. 2009, 02:23pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by iLuwMuffinz<3

this is nice :]
I loved you forever
I loved you with my heart
but u left me there
crying and tearing all apart

thats little of mine :rolleyes:

:p that's not half bad.
15 Dec. 2009, 02:25pm
Oharo - kun

Code:

I may be funny. As a clown can be. But all you can see. Is the little part of me. Slowly take a breath. Then look into my heart and you'll see. The sad part of me.

I love poetry, but I'm not so good when it comes to grammars.
Anyway, i made this one when i saw your thread.
Took 15 minutes.
15 Dec. 2009, 02:28pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by Oharo - kun

Code:

I may be funny. As a clown can be. But all you can see. Is the little part of me. Slowly take a breath. Then look into my heart and you'll see. The sad part of me.

I love poetry, but I'm not so good when it comes to grammars.
Anyway, i made this one when i saw your thread.
Took 15 minutes.

haha. I like that. It's like a hidden meaning underneath what everyone sees. :p mine took me 20 minutes. Tieing off the end was the hardest part.
15 Dec. 2009, 02:31pm
Oharo - kun

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raivu

haha. I like that. It's like a hidden meaning underneath what everyone sees. :p mine took me 20 minutes. Tieing off the end was the hardest part.

Thanks :]
Ohh, and that fast.? o.0
Yours was beautiful, I like the doggy part too. xP
15 Dec. 2009, 02:35pm
C0FFINCASE

Nice stuff. I used to write all the time in high school...especially in math.

Quote:

Look to the night sky
Heaven can't lie
the past won't hide
in the stars so high
time can't pass on by
the truth it holds
thus the past unfolds
but never before your eye

Quote:

In this time of trouble Mother Mary comes to me,
whispering sweetly "Let it be."
I wake up to the sound of music,
early in the morning the sun is shinning down on me.
My spirit soars, my hear is weak and aches to be, with thee again.
Time will lend me strength and Mother walks by me.
I let Her song set this man free.
It carries me through the darkness,
never ceasing, never failing me.
So the light shines for me.

Quote:

So You think you can tell
Heaven from Hell?
What if we're all just souls
in fish bowls?
Looking for reason.
Answers in plain sight.
Sayin' "Yeah follow the light"
ah, but I'm not right.

They said its ok
if I don't know any way
but that is a lie,
just like "You're gonna fly"
Shot holes in my heart.
Engine won't start.

I'm all gone.
The shell remains,
so on goes the game
The people can see
its just not me.

Don't know where I am.
But I'm still here...
Hidden by fear.
Don' think they'd understand.
Don't think they know
Don't want them to star.e.
Don't think they'd care.
So I can't let them near.

Can't stand here.
Can't Be Alone.
So I hung up the phone.
Nobody's home.

Now I'm lost.
Can't seem to find any thing
Not even a dime
to send out the call.

What do I do?
I won't slip away.
Two side of the coin.
Can they be one?

Pictures different on the other side.
Kids keep tapping on the glass.
My head ache won't pass.

Can I break free
Now that I see
The problem's
with
me?

The looking glass won't tell.
What you call Heaven, I call Hell.

Quote:

Hark, where now is the horn that was blowing?
Where now is the rider, whose heart beat true?
What has become of the horses’ manes’ flowing?
What of the slick mail and swords, do they not strike true?

What has become of our once valiant race?
Passed into time without reason or rhyme
have we now fallen so far from former grace?
Foolishly seeking filthy wealth that shine.

Some have not yet forgotten that truly great age.
Always telling romantic tales; wide eyed
We wait on in our cursed social cage;
Our true ideals unable to hide;

Still we seek to live in the bygone past.
Seems that everyone ask “how can you last?”

Quote:

There or here, here or there.
To choose one seems so unfair
to stay I wonder if I'll dare?

To leave them all behind
or go on down the line
out there, somewhere
maybe one I can call mine
still friends are hard to come by.

Thus my misgivings abound
a choice too great for me to call
still they must hound
as to which collegic hall.

Let it be;
To enjoy this time is key,
later I will pay the fee.

The river ever rushes on.
I'll end up where I belong.
It won't be long.
15 Dec. 2009, 02:46pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

Nice stuff. I used to write all the time in high school...especially in math.

:o is there anything you CAN'T do? :p

@Oharu-kun: Thanks. ^_^ Mans best friend.
15 Dec. 2009, 02:48pm
Oharo - kun

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

Nice stuff. I used to write all the time in high school...especially in math.

Wow, that's some nice collection.

Code:

I love you, sweetest thing i can say. Words I can prove all day. As soon as you ask me "do you really do?" I'll answer with my whole heart "Of course! I really do." Then you'll smile seductively, looking at me upside down. You took a deep breath, as I'm thinking what you'll do. Then you reach out and turn on your PS3

Took me 20 minutes... I don't know how to finish it. xP
15 Dec. 2009, 02:51pm
C0FFINCASE

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raivu

:o is there anything you CAN'T do? :p

Can't fly yet.

Nice stuff Oharo - kun
15 Dec. 2009, 02:54pm
Oharo - kun

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

Can't fly yet.

Nice stuff Oharo - kun

Thanks. xP
I don't have much experience making these stuffs.
So, i don't really know if they're good or not.
15 Dec. 2009, 02:57pm
C0FFINCASE

Its an interesting format and style. The more you write the better you'll get and the more you'll develop your style and form.
15 Dec. 2009, 03:00pm
Oharo - kun

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

Its an interesting format and style. The more you write the better you'll get and the more you'll develop your style and form.

What do you mean by the word "format"? o.0

Well, My works always have a rhythm or a pattern.
Whatever you can call it, so I'm guessing that's the format thing.?
15 Dec. 2009, 03:02pm
C0FFINCASE

Quote:

Originally Posted by Oharo - kun

What do you mean by the word "format"? o.0

Well, My works always have a rhythm or a pattern.
Whatever you can call it, so I'm guessing that's the format thing.?

Form, format, whatever.
The arrangement of your end rhymes in the first one was interesting to me.
15 Dec. 2009, 03:04pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

Can't fly yet.

Nice stuff Oharo - kun

I'm not convinced yet.

I like poetry. You can tell an entire life story in just 12 lines and have it be 10 times more powerful than an actual story.
15 Dec. 2009, 03:06pm
Oharo - kun

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

Form, format, whatever.
The arrangement of your end rhymes in the first one was interesting to me.

I see, I'll try to make another one while doing homework.
Then I'll post it here :)

Later guys.
15 Dec. 2009, 03:07pm
Sydd

I like poetry, and story writing. I'll post something later when I'm not on my iPod.
:]
15 Dec. 2009, 03:08pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sydd(:

I like poetry, and story writing. I'll post something later when I'm not on my iPod.
:]

nice. I can't wait. :)
15 Dec. 2009, 03:18pm
C0FFINCASE

We need a writing/poetry section now.
Less is always more Raivu. That's the power of poetry. To quote Clapton "The space between notes is far more important that the notes." It always about what you don't say but still do that determines the power of you statements.
15 Dec. 2009, 03:27pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

We need a writing/poetry section now.
Less is always more Raivu. That's the power of poetry. To quote Clapton "The space between notes is far more important that the notes." It always about what you don't say but still do that determines the power of you statements.

I'm going to sig that. I love clapton. And yeah, we do. I was looking for one before I made this thread, but all I saw was the drawing one. lol. A writhing/poetry section would be amazing.
15 Dec. 2009, 03:42pm
C0FFINCASE

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raivu

I'm going to sig that. I love clapton. And yeah, we do. I was looking for one before I made this thread, but all I saw was the drawing one. lol. A writhing/poetry section would be amazing.

You've been sig as well.
Yeah a writing section and music section then I think we're good.
Hm, I think I'll go record something and post it. The you guys can write poems(lyrics to it).
15 Dec. 2009, 06:32pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by C0FFINCASE

You've been sig as well.
Yeah a writing section and music section then I think we're good.
Hm, I think I'll go record something and post it. The you guys can write poems(lyrics to it).

that's actually good, because I also need lyrics (and someone with a good singing voice) for my songs too. x_x
15 Dec. 2009, 06:47pm
Oharo - kun

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raivu

that's actually good, because I also need lyrics (and someone with a good singing voice) for my songs too. x_x

My voice was said to be good, but need to practice more...
I can sing, just provide the lyrics and the background music. xP
15 Dec. 2009, 06:53pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by Oharo - kun

My voice was said to be good, but need to practice more...
I can sing, just provide the lyrics and the background music. xP

:) Alright. I'm almost finished with my new piece. I do a lot of digital work and mixing/remixing.
15 Dec. 2009, 06:56pm
C0FFINCASE

Quote:

Originally Posted by Oharo - kun

My voice was said to be good, but need to practice more...
I can sing, just provide the lyrics and the background music. xP

I do good back ups but I'm not lead unless we're in my key.
15 Dec. 2009, 07:08pm
Oharo - kun

@Raivu. - What genre would that song be.? o.0

@Coffin. - Bass guitar.? o.0
Would be great if it is.
15 Dec. 2009, 09:05pm
Sydd

My other notebook of them were better, But heres two. PS) Most of it doesnt rhyme for a reason, at any rate, here it is.

Quote:

Tonight is the night.
Where we welcome the dead ones into our souls,
Into our life.
Sometimes, they need to speak for themselves.
Not tell lies.
They know what really happened.
And tell us, so we know to.
How tonight began.
And how tonight flew.
They tell stories about life.
Just for today, just to grasp tonight.
Tonight is where it all began.
And just got out of hand.
And tonight there very near, to sing there song, and make it clear.
Some were collected, some were not, but, they fought and fought.
Some were seen, some were not, depending on what they brought.
If they were happy and glad, not sad or mad, they'd be seen, which isnt bad.
Some were big, some were small, some were short, some were tall, All were recognized within time, Because they had to rhyme.

This is only avaiable tonight, NOT tomorrow, when the darkness erupts and the sun dies, its only seeable within your eyes.

Why? Its just tonight.

Rather dark one i wrote.^

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The In crowd-Sydd(: 10-20-09:2:13am

So, people think your cool, your the popular one at school.
You get everyones attention, your really adored.
But, you made a mistake when you got bored.
Do you regret it at all?
Now your not part of what is defined to be ...
"The in crowd"
15 Dec. 2009, 09:27pm
Taz

I dont like poetry but nice i didn\'t know Raivu wrote poetry o.O.
15 Dec. 2009, 09:29pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sydd(:

My other notebook of them were better, But heres two. PS) Most of it doesnt rhyme for a reason, at any rate, here it is.

Rather dark one i wrote.^

:o those are awesome. I especially love the last one.

@Oharo: :p depends on what mood I"m in. Right now I'm working on a soft core techno/piano piece, but other time I'll do a lot of scratch beat and mix rock.

@Taz: I do a lot of things people didn't know I do. ;)
15 Dec. 2009, 09:47pm
C0FFINCASE

Quote:

Originally Posted by Oharo - kun

@Raivu. - What genre would that song be.? o.0

@Coffin. - Bass guitar.? o.0
Would be great if it is.

I meant back up vocals. I usually play lead guitar though...sometimes rhythm. I can manage bass if we need it.

*likes that this has gone from poem thread to LG Band.
16 Dec. 2009, 12:10am
Sydd

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raivu

:o those are awesome. I especially love the last one.

Thanks. :]
When i get unlazy ill look in my other notebook for some.
Literally, i have 2 notebooks in my bed, [queen bed] for when i comeup with a idea.
Think thats bad?
I use 5 pencils to draw with.
So i have about 30+ drawings in my one notebook, along with paper.
So yeah.(:

Oh and yesterday, my dad almost found my one story.>.>
I snatched it before he read it.
16 Dec. 2009, 01:34am
iamwilliam

nice poem raivu
i dont do poetry
but i might get into it
16 Dec. 2009, 02:31am
Gabe

I like everyone\'s poetry. Good job. I like reading, not writing so much.
16 Dec. 2009, 03:30am
pringles

thats real creative, i suck at poetry even though i try as hard as i can
16 Dec. 2009, 04:07am
Sydd

Guys, I write about personal experinced and stuff.
You can write about anything.:]
16 Dec. 2009, 12:45pm
Raivu

You don\'t have to be good at poetry to be able to write it. :p
16 Dec. 2009, 06:12pm
Oharo - kun

Old one.

Code:

I may be funny. As a clown can be. But all you can see. Is the little part of me. Slowly take a breath. Then look into my heart and you\'ll see. The sad part of me.

Some changes.

Code:

I may be funny. As a clown can be. But you only see, the little part of me. Take a deep breath. And look into my heart. There you\'ll see. The bitter part of me.
16 Dec. 2009, 07:12pm
Halogod

Quote:

Originally Posted by Oharo - kun

Old one.

Code:

I may be funny. As a clown can be. But all you can see. Is the little part of me. Slowly take a breath. Then look into my heart and you'll see. The sad part of me.

Some changes.

Code:

I may be funny. As a clown can be. But you only see, the little part of me. Take a deep breath. And look into my heart. There you'll see. The bitter part of me.

I like the second one alot. The changes you made went well with it.
16 Dec. 2009, 07:18pm
Oharo - kun

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Originally Posted by Halogod

I like the second one alot. The changes you made went well with it.

I know :)
And thank you. :P

I'm currently working on another one, a poet about me :)
I'll share it when its finished, I just don't know how long it'll go.
16 Dec. 2009, 08:02pm
Raivu

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sydd(:

Thanks. :]
When i get unlazy ill look in my other notebook for some.
Literally, i have 2 notebooks in my bed, [queen bed] for when i comeup with a idea.
Think thats bad?
I use 5 pencils to draw with.
So i have about 30+ drawings in my one notebook, along with paper.
So yeah.(:

Oh and yesterday, my dad almost found my one story.>.>
I snatched it before he read it.

haha. that's not too bad. :p
I have about 9 different drawing pencils on me at all time, and a good mechanical one usually tucked behind my ear, or in my back pocket. I've also filled out about...hang on. brb...

...37 different sketchpads and I have 10 full 3-ring 5 subject notebooks and binders stuffed with hand-drawn hentai and a lot of my old mangas I used to work on way back on 5th and 6th grade. :p

I think you and I would get along really well Sydd. :) You just became one of my favorite people.

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