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Tried Writing For A Change

920 views · started by Snow-kun ·
#1
Tried Writing For A Change
Staring at the dark lonely sky
Looking for a way to make a new adventure
Treasuring each second of life
Never regretting all the fun you have
Making dreams come true one by one
Working hard to reach that final dream
Find a way through it
Accomplish your goals
And avoiding obstacles while on the way
Fighting for honour and glory
And each step you take makes
A hope for people to admire you.
#2
It's ok, it doesn't flow great, but has potential, keep working on it. ^_^
#3
There is no rhyming but i must admit that the words are extremely powerful and meaning is lucid and clear. The poem has a loud voice but you should name it something for better poetic emphasis
#4
This is a great poem :)

I agree with ash 100% Very Lucid and clear.
#5
Bman wrote:
This is a great poem :)

I agree with ash 100% Very Lucid and clear.


Well, i also agree with Ash and Bman.
Ur poem look very clear. >=)
#6
Nice, Not every poem must rhyme young grass hopper (: