How to improve this poem?
I posted this here because I'm serious, and I don't want spammy bull crap posted in the thread. Anyways. I have this poem and it doesn't seem right to me. How can I make it better?
All I did was fantasize.
No lie.
Why do I need to hide these tears behind my eyes.
Now I can just realize.
That I've been hypnotized.
The feeling are, somewhat surreal.
Layers of my heart starting to peel.
Why is this the way I feel?
I guess hearts are what you know, how to steal.
You are miss perfect.
Not just a close friend.
When I hug you, I don't want that feeling to ever end.
Don't let this be make believe, and never ever ever pretend.
Maybe by now you understand.
Why I say sorry all the time, beginning to end.
I don't want our friendship to end, like an average amateur band.
But I'll be honest. When I looked in your eyes, I became your number 1 fan.
kthnx :ouch...it hurts: