So this is just a simple poem I just wrote up real quick for my boyfriend (its our 5 month anniversary) and it pretty much describes our story...I met him when I was 8 and fell in love he was my childhood crush (we dated once for a week in third grade) and it was never really returned and I dreamt of him for years until I turned 20 and he actually gave me a real chance (and he fell head over heals of course ) so yeah feedback on the poem??


FOREVERS MAKE

Our eyes first met
When I was just eight
My heart was set
That you'd be my mate

I longed for you
Your soul to take
To love and hold
Forevers make

A childs dream
Come so far
My love for you
Suffocated within a Jar

I dreamt of days
That would never fade
A childs heart
A dream be made

Down a rocky road
Breathe with-held
My dreams come alive
Two souls are meld

You are my half
The only one
Forever take
Til we are done

Ill love you strong
Until death arrives
And forever long
Our souls will entwine.