I'll have to go with minora on this one... just the first two lines read like most other poem beginnings...
But yes I was able to tell is was for a song, and I think it can work out as is. It's...
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- 04 Dec. 2010, 06:05pm
Thread: Love Hurts
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I'll have to go with minora on this one... just...
- 04 Dec. 2010, 06:01pm
Thread: Chapter 1.
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Well excuse me. a balance of the two is...
Well excuse me.
a balance of the two is nessisary... You can't simple introduce a character as "the man was wearing all black, had a gruff personality, one eye twichched madly when he smiled and... - 01 Dec. 2010, 03:18pm
Thread: Chapter 1.
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At the beginning, one thing that stood out to me...
At the beginning, one thing that stood out to me the most was "He needs to SHOW his character, not TELL" yet when I reached the end I saw why you chose this particular format.
Since this chapter...
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