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tell me what you think i made it a long time ago and it was a day before my birthday when i made it
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tell me what you think i made it a long time ago and it was a day before my birthday when i made it
I don't mean to be rude or anything but I hate it when people write a bunch of nonsensical giberish and call it a poem.
It doesn't rhyme, there's no syllabic pattern and over all it doesn't make much sense.
I can't even read it, post as text please?
i had to use a magnifying glass, and after that I cried. :(
needs to ryhme or have some sort of rhythm, without it its not really a poem, but more like your thoughts summed up?
I like the emotion. Like I said before, not every poem has to rhyme. A poem is something that expresses emotion and flows together smoothly. Rhyming does help the structure but not every poem has it.
Of course not every poem has to rhyme, but every poem has to actually make some sense, and it has to flow, has to have rhythm this has nothing. It's touching and a good read, but I don't think it should be classified as a poem.
At least he made his feelings clear. And didnt confuse me with the use of very uhh.. deep words
I still can't read it. );
ill put it in text now ok?Quote:
Originally Posted by Vin
Love or is it Not?
When I see you i don't know what to say.
We hardly know each other and i see us together but not for real.
But not in life only in dream for now maybe forever.
So when or if we be in love that everyone cherishes.
If we are not unknown to each other anymore.
Maybe just maybe we would meet each other and we would know
That we found our one and only that would help us through life.
But before all this happens we must meet and know each other.
So my question is? Is this love or is it not?
It's a free verse poem, it's not meant to rhyme.
In any case even if it a free verse poem, does at least need some sort of flow to it. I'm sorry and it may come off rude, but that wasn't a very good poem. You need to work on better vocabulary and description in your poem. It sort of just seems like you just wrote down what you thought would sound poetic, and not really put your heart into the poem. You also over use the same words over and over. In any case I'd work on it. Sorry. ;x
Go online and see if a poem MUST have rhyme or rhythm.Quote:
Originally Posted by Minora
Because it doesn't.
If you want rhythm and rhyme go listen to rap.
Poems can have rhythm and rhyme however that restricts the artist to certain words.
On topic
I liked it, work on your form a little :P
Hmm...not every poem has to rhyme, although I was a bit confused with the flow of your poem. You have a concept there but maybe you can still work on the cohesion of your lines.~
its an interesting poem
i think it made sense 10/10
thnk you very muchQuote:
Originally Posted by Gina
Poems don't need to have a structure. It's called Open Form or Free Verse.Quote:
Originally Posted by Minora
All I could think about was sex when I read that. Sorry. I hope that didn't offend you, but that's what came to mind at the last line.
Haha.. how?Quote:
Originally Posted by jj.sam
While I read that, I thought of lovers, not people having sex.. :P
I'm sorry, I'm a perv, I admit. You caught me.
This part "But before all this happens we must meet and know each other.
So my question is? Is this love or is it not?"
Before.. WHAT happens? I thought, oh yes, sex.
Meet, I thought of.. Meat.
And in the "is this love" part, I thought of making love, very rough love.
Kill me, kill me not for a perv I am, or so I thought.
actually yes that really did offend me because it has nothing to do with sexQuote:
Originally Posted by jj.sam
You'll get over it.
wow dude are you that much of an ass??Quote:
Originally Posted by jj.sam
Poems don't require rhyme. Anyone who thinks so needs to grow out of their 5th grade poetry level.